Comments on: 3WW: Colliding Worldsâ€¦:Afford, cigarette, dim; a psychological sexual suspense novel being written online: chapter 10

By: TC

TC — Tue, 04 Dec 2007 18:10:49 +0000

I can’t tell you how badly I feel right now. I came and looked for a post last Wednesday and never found one. I went to “the page” and looked there, and found a chapter I hadn’t read yet, but I didn’t see this. Ahhh! I guess computers were out to get me :-/ Glad I finally found it though.

For eleven years he had taken her for granted.

That really stuck out at me in the entire thing. I guess because so many people are guilty of it. I’d venture to guess everyone.

Hopefully I’ll be able to find your next chapter this week

By: billy

billy — Fri, 30 Nov 2007 13:08:46 +0000

great stuff

By: Doug

Doug — Fri, 30 Nov 2007 12:22:33 +0000

I second Cooper. I like your writing this way. I’m more than curious why Nell sank.

By: Sandy

Sandy — Fri, 30 Nov 2007 05:44:57 +0000

Very good, Pia but…oh no, not Nell at the bottom of the pool!

Getting the pop corn ready for the next installment.

By: a.tag.along.traveler

a.tag.along.traveler — Thu, 29 Nov 2007 22:51:58 +0000

ahhh you cant let her die!!! Whats next whats next!!!!

By: Bone

Bone — Thu, 29 Nov 2007 22:13:13 +0000

she looked at him with no recognition in her deep blue eyes

Seemingly so simple, yet such a strong line.

I can’t overstate what a fantastic job you’re doing of getting into Nell’s mind. You really become her and that’s part of what makes this story so wonderful and so real.

I’ve also had that “Oh! She’s a girl” realization before. Very eye opening. I always enjoy finding another girl in my life.

By: jacob

jacob — Thu, 29 Nov 2007 17:59:56 +0000

I’ve been keepinng up,loving it. I don
t know where you are going but I likeit,

By: Christine

Christine — Thu, 29 Nov 2007 14:26:54 +0000

You have a great mind for creating plot, which for me is very hard. I am intrigued by the idea that Nell teaches learned intuition. It creates a mystery around her, and shows she has skills beyond the ordinary. I like the future setting, with the world controlled by corporations, and also that they began selling weed because it was more lucrative. Great stuff!

By: cooper

cooper — Thu, 29 Nov 2007 05:45:03 +0000

As always this is great stuff. I enjoy you writing like this.

By: Shayna

Shayna — Thu, 29 Nov 2007 03:51:15 +0000

Well the Title got me reading… not that I don’t read ya… but it got me a little curious. I am impressed and would like more.

I have missed ya!