Comments on: 3WW: Picture; reflected; stop: Fiction; The End of the World

By: Bone

Bone — Tue, 29 Apr 2008 18:20:41 +0000

I was captivated, beginning to end. Think they call that good writing.

He compared her to a wave that looked as though it was going to break big time but came in gently.

When you manage to combine ocean imagery with good writing, I consider that the perfect line Loved the “just because” also.

Miz BoheMia — Tue, 29 Apr 2008 02:23:08 +0000

Oh you never cease to amaze me my dearest Pia… beautiful!

As for the post below, I loved “FOR THE FIRST TIME WE HAVE A CANDIDATE WHO UNDERSTANDS BOTH THE BLACK AND WHITE WORLD”…

I hate the games in politics… it can make the best of people seem so tainted. *sigh* Hopefully the truth will shine and win out this time around!

And PS… I owe you an email! I have not forgotten!

Doug — Mon, 28 Apr 2008 17:03:00 +0000

I agree with Lissa. It sounds right. Americans don’t typically try to be typical.

Marcia (MeeAugraphie) — Sat, 26 Apr 2008 03:24:17 +0000

Love the little details, Pia: the cop with his Master’s, her shell paintings, the wave comparison. And the last line is clever.

rel — Sat, 26 Apr 2008 02:25:37 +0000

Pia,
You’re a good story teller/dream weaver!
So, why is she with the cop now>
rel

Tammy — Fri, 25 Apr 2008 18:18:17 +0000

I enjoyed your story Pia and I’m anxious to read more.

P.S. I always regret doing form poetry once I start. They give me headaches.

Linda Jacobs — Fri, 25 Apr 2008 13:23:55 +0000

I love the wave metaphor! Very interesting story and one I hope to read more of!

sage — Fri, 25 Apr 2008 13:06:35 +0000

Nicely done–amazing how we keep coming back to those who we should let go–who have hurt us…

WriterKat — Fri, 25 Apr 2008 03:46:25 +0000

You have some strong characters and room for exploring. It really opens up nicely.

lissa — Fri, 25 Apr 2008 01:52:09 +0000

quite a realistic story, at least in my opinion