Comments on: 3WW: abandon; gradual; precise: fiction

By: Doug

Doug — Fri, 04 Jun 2010 16:25:03 +0000

Phew, that sure did take a turn. I like this a lot. It reminds me of June Tabor’s Barmaid song.

By: Dee

Dee — Tue, 01 Jun 2010 22:00:39 +0000

wow this was painful to read Pia, so sad and scary.

By: sage

sage — Sat, 29 May 2010 18:20:34 +0000

Powerful and sad. Great storytelling but tragic as I’ve known people in relationships like that.

By: Susan Helene Gottfried

Susan Helene Gottfried — Sat, 29 May 2010 12:29:13 +0000

I see why this makes you uncomfortable. It’s a hard scene, but you’ve told it beautifully.

By: Bone

Bone — Fri, 28 May 2010 21:28:41 +0000

You really get into the character when you write fiction. I think that you could go on with this story or, to use your words, any really

For some reason the paragraph about her having to sit alone at the factory really stood out to me. That was a great descriptive paragraph. It just brought out his abuse and obsessiveness even more.

By: Carlos

Carlos — Fri, 28 May 2010 09:29:29 +0000

I knew a woman who was involved with a guy like this. Brought back memories.

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Fri, 28 May 2010 01:51:25 +0000

You got it out very beautifully. Poignant, sad, well done. undefined paths

By: pia

pia — Fri, 28 May 2010 01:44:19 +0000

Thank you all for these wonderful comments. They give me the want to go on with this story or any really

By: Matt Merritt

Matt Merritt — Fri, 28 May 2010 00:06:35 +0000

Really great. You captured her helplessness perfectly.

By: cooper

cooper — Thu, 27 May 2010 21:27:52 +0000

That felt like a small episode of some thing spectacular.